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Sunday, 26 June 2016

My description.

Week 8 Term 2. Kia ora. This week we have been learning how to write  descriptions.You have to use  your senses and keep all the same ideas together.

Princess Rapunzel is 6 years old. She has beautiful long golden hair that trails behind her. Her eyes are solid hazel. A silver crown sits upon her head.She has a flowing purple dress with hints of pink. Her skin tone is pale pink.

She lives at a golden palace with small amounts of white. When she sings her hair lights up with golden streaks. Her personality is always cheery and she is always smiling.

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2 comments:

  1. Anonymous27 June 2016 at 12:02

    Hi Kirsten
    Love your writing.
    Braeden

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  2. Mrs Brajkovich1 July 2016 at 18:46

    Hi Kirsten
    I really like your description of the princess.I think your sentence about the white and gold palace needs work though. I would write something like: She lived in a beautiful palace which was built out of glistening white stone and all the chimneys, rooftops, balconies and windows were trimmed with gold.
    Does that suit the mind picture that you wanted?

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