Learning Journey

Friday, 22 May 2015

Hunted

One dark night in the middle of a forest a jungle boy was roaming. Suddenly he felt hungry and smelt some food. He felt something in his belly so he looked down and his belly was rumbling. He sniffed the air and the smell was still there. He went wondering around and over big boxes to find the food. Suddenly he saw the food which was a cooked chicken.  He ran to the chicken but the floor under him was a trap he fell through the trap and found himself face to face with a hunter. The hunter blinded him and when he could see again he was  upside down the hunter walked over to him and bit the last piece of meat of the bone he said it would be the jungle boys lucky day. But the jungle boY did not think that it was his lucky day so he broke the bone it was a wishbone when he broke it realized that it could help him to unlock the padlock but he had to wait till the hunter was occupied suddenly the hunter got a call from his friend asking him if he’d got the jungle boy
the hunter said yes and that he would meet the queen.Sudenly the hunter heard something the boy had escaped the hunter got very angry.He saw the boy as he jumped out of his tent.  Both of them started running  the boy got to thew hole that he fell through he saw the camera that blinded him and dived for it the hunter got him and made him angry so the jungle boy blinded the hunter and started running the jungle boy ran through a cage and the huter banged into it when the hunter woke up he was op high and the jungle boy was holding the cage and the hunter heard music and looked down and saw so many jungle boys.

5 comments:

  1. HI Kirsten


    From Mekayla

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  2. Hi Kirsten
    I like this narrative very much. BUT I think it would be easier to read if you used more punctuation, capitalization and sentence structure. Also quotes " ..." to let me know when someone is talking would be helpful.
    Great effort and thank you for posting another narrative.
    Mum

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  4. Cool mum thanks :(

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  5. Cool mum thanks :(

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